What are your thoughts on this song I started writing (please be insightful)?

Its good. I find certain parts to not be so clear and it is lacking a chorus. I'm not sure the verse, "his house is empty... seemingly empty..." makes very much sense,, but don't change your song based on anyones opinions. if you look at my profile you'll see I'v put up a lot of songs to and believe me, no matter what the comment was a have never changed a word. I give you song an 8/10. good job